My critique would be about the fact that I can't figure out the place where this happens. Is she at the street? because I notice some (well it's what it looks like to me ) rocks behind her and I can't place this moment. Are those steps where she is standing. is it a plaza? I'm so confused, I have no idea what you wanted to portray, I love the robot and feelings you wanted to show us viewers, but we should also be able to recognize the story, why is she there, where did she come from, and so on.
The details are also bugging me, the lamps lack detail, and I understand your sense of focus it's great, but it lacks depth. Your painting doesn't have many things to detail so you could have put more effort on the lamps and backgroung, as much as you did on the robot.
About the lightning, to create a better mood, those lamps could be pointing out at the robot and give a direct light to it, some fog around the light, because it's raining. In this kind of work, shadow and light make a really huge difference.
I really like your work, your gallery is strong and if I could reach your level would be awesome! So I know I'm not good enough to point everything in an exact way, I just hope my opinion is enough so you can improve your skills
Well, I just didn't give the environment much thought, but you are absolutely right about it being very vague.
The reason I didnt put much detail on the background is because it isn't neccessary, you overdetaling is not always good. I agree it does need more detail though, I should've added some windows, etc to make it look like she's on the street.
About the fog yea, that would actually be interesting, and maybe pushing the lighting abit might make it more interesting.
Thanks for your input I'll definetly keep those things you said in mind.
I actually kinda like this. I think you pinned the mood down quite well. ^^
Let's see, I think the first thing I'd comment on is the composition. Not that there's anything terribly wrong with it, but just at the first glance it could use a bit more visual interest in the lower half (or a tighter crop, or a slight upward shift of the view maybe?). The layout works though, I like how the street lamps frame the picture somehow. Speaking of, besides the perspective difference, all four lamps seem to be drawn with the same depth (in terms of sharpness anyway), which sort of brings me to the next point, the light source for the robot seems to be coming mostly from behind and the left side, which would be fine except that the robot looks placed right at the center which would make you expect it to be lit equally from all sides. I guess the same could be said about the rain, as normally you'd expect it to be visible only within the light rays (although thinking about it more, I don't know if changing that part would make the image stronger or weaker in terms of composition and it might just end up competing with your subject in terms of visual interest).
Ah, sorry I don't know if that made a lot of sense. I do like this piece though, the mood definitely won me over.
Yea, you are absolutely right about the lighting lol, kinda weird there's so little light front. About the sharpness, well I didn't blur it to create a sense of depth, more a sense of focus, if you focus on something, everything else gets blurry. That's what I wanted to capture.
About the rain, yea, I could probably get rid of some of it, especially at the dark area.
Thanks for your crit! It was really helpful, I will try to keep these thins in mind next time I draw something similiar. So get moving and upload something
Thumbs up! And fair enough about the focus, looking at it again I can definitely see that now. (Quick somewhat unrelated question though: how long does it usually take you to make these? You've got quite some of these in your gallery and you seem to be very efficient with them.)
Well it depends, some took longer and some quicker. I am getting quicker by every painting so it's hard to say. I'd say I average around 4-5 hours. This one took about 1-2 hours. The older ones obviously took alot longer since I was mostly trying to get hang of the painting technique, which I am actually still struggling with.
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